Writing a Recount

Abigail’s Recount Writing Learning story

The Problem:  

How do I retell a significant event so others can share my experience?

My recount:

Jack and the Beanstalk: From the perspective of the Giant I was asleep on my nice bed then I smell someone coming inside. then I woke up and I saw a boy running away. so I ran after that boy and I caught him.then I slip so he ran as fast as he could.then on the next day jack Came back and he didn’t knock On the door. he climbed through the window when mum was cooking food for me. So I said Fee fi fo fum I smell a child with my nose. so I got this piano so it made me go to sleep. Jack quickly ran out of the oven and ran away and climbed down the beanstalk. and then I ran after him then he said to get the cross so him and his mother cut the beanstalk down. Then I fell on the ground.

Success criteria: (highlight the success criteria your writing shows)

I can use-

• A powerful hook to get the reader’s attention
• Where, when and who in the introduction to set the scene
• An introduction- middle- conclusion
• The 5 W’s (where, when, why, who,  what, and why) and 1 H (how) to add detail
• Dialogue to tell what happened
• The past tense
• Descriptive words to make the writing interesting
• Precise words to let the reader know what exactly happened.
• Connectives to make the  story flow from one group of ideas to another.
• Punctuation to help the reader understand the ideas
• Personal voice like I think….

My Learning:  (Choose 3 to write about)

I was good at ….. because….. I got better at ….. because….. It is hard to ….. because….. I feel ….. when….. because….. My next steps are ….. because….. I am going to achieve my next steps by ….. because….. I used the key competency of ________ as learning power because….. I needed to use the key competency of _______ as learning power because.... ________ thinks I am good at ….. because…..

I feel happy when I am on my own because I can get my work done.

It was hard to understand the idea because you have to listen carefully because you mate repeat the ides

I was good at writing because I sound out the world that I am stuck on like confusing.

Measuring in Maths

Abigail’s Maths learning Story

The Maths problem:  

Clayton thought that this shape would make an interesting garden.  What is the perimeter of this garden? What is the area?

The story of the Maths problem: (use your own words)

Clayton thought that this shape is interesting for the garden to make.

What we were trying to find out:

We were trying to find out the perimeter of the garden and the area.

How we solved the problem:

First I added the 12m&4m =16 so then I added 4+6=10 then I added 5+6=11 then I added 7 but I added the 16+10+11+7=44m.

Working as a group is important:  

I am good at sharing my ideas because I can speak loud I am getting better at listening  because I can repeat their idea

Reading

Abigail’s Term 1 Reading Learning Story

How do we make meaning from the texts we read using a range of reading strategies?

I chose this Library book to read at silent reading time because I’m Interested in the book I chose because its cool.
I located information in the story when Geronimo came in the morning grandfather pulled his ear I know because it said in the book.     I located this information by looking at the world's that told me was giggled, groaned, risking, scream, silent.
I worked out that she is always scared at the dark I used the book that gave me clues and the clues that gave me was
I found out that an important idea from my other book when I was reading it made me think about when Benjamin didn't know how to fly a plane.
I used what I know about and ideas from the story about The book I was reading was the curse of the cheese pyramid in that book it said in winter it’s always cold and in my other book could the princess of the castle when it’s is winter in the princess of the castle it’s frozen.
I enjoyed reading this book because it was so good and it made me get stuck into the book that I was reading.

My friends

We have started 2018 sharing some information about ourselves with the world.

I wrote to share about My spare time with you.

I have worked on editing it to check that my capital letters and full stops are correct.  

I have used feedback from my learning buddy and my teacher to make it the more interesting and effective.

My friends.

I just want to tell you about my friends.

My friends are... Aano, Breeze, Madison, Rina, Mel, kaylah, Sareta, Aysha and Jahn. I chose them because they’re fun to play with.

I like Kaylah because she is so funny.

My sister Sareta is nice and she is good at hiding me at home, like last time at home, my sister hid me under my bed. When my little sister Tausili came in she didn't know I was hiding under my bed.

Aysha is nice and fun.

Mel is cool and funny.

Jahn is quiet and fun too.

-Abigail

MY FIRST POSRT

Hi! My name is Abigail and I am a year 4.

I like to play netball because I need to practice shooting my goal shots.  I also like playing at the Big Park.  When I go back in class and see a mess on the floor, I have  to pick the mess up off the floor.  When I go back home, sometimes I like to play tag with my sisters.  They are Sareta, Tausili and Hatesa.  

Rain silver balls

We were singing song from a book that could Rain silver balls ping pong.